I'm a writer too, and the first thing you need to do is believe in yourself. Even the greatest stories have flaws and people who donât like them. Thatâs completely normal. If you're Ethiopian, I suggest you start writing in your own language firstâbecause it might help you express your ideas and emotions more clearly. When writing in English, itâs possible you donât yet have the full range of vocabulary to capture everything you want to say. So write freely, and donât stop just because some people donât understand or appreciate it right away.
honestly, itâs a powerful and emotional piece. The idea of Death wishing to be human is deep and really well done. Your imagery and the poetic tone make it unique and touching. You clearly have talent.
That said, a few parts could be cleanerâsome sentences are a bit repetitive or slightly unclear. A little editing would make it even stronger. But don't let that discourage you. The message is beautiful, and you made me feel somethingâand thatâs what great writing
Apr 17, 2025