I don't read fictions but i can clearly see a lot of grammatical errors in it

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It's good just keep doing what u do

I just read the first 6 lines and got bored after that but from what I read it's up to qualities I've read before, keep going We'll know you're name within short time🫡

I am amazed really, Didn't read it well but it has got good words, and the flow of the ideas is good, But like if u love writing then just keep on writing, don't try to make a master piece on ur first writings,

Work on the opening

Dm @heythere109